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Dramatic Tension

What is dramatic tension? Merriam-Webster states dramatic is “sudden and extreme, greatly affecting people’s emotions” and defines Tension as an “inner striving, unrest, or imbalance, often with a physiological indication of emotion or a state of latent hostility or opposition between individuals or groups.”

Put them together and you have “a sudden or extreme unrest which increases emotions, hostility, or opposition between individuals.” Talk about a page-turner. Setting characters up with this type of tension will keep readers engaged.

We could also describe it as a sudden conflict or unexpected change that blocks the character from his mental or physical goals, causing fear, stress, tension, or anger toward others or within oneself.

Dramatic action comes by blocking the goal or task at hand, disagreements or distrust between characters, a shocking, unexpected revelation, or by ramping up the element of surprise.

A myriad of scenarios can cause tension, as in these examples.

1. The hero or heroine mysteriously disappears and causes a sudden fear of the unknown.

2. An unexpected intrusion of a villain creeping through the house or an attack increases tension.

3. Rain turns to ice, making roads impassable amid a hostage situation or a high-speed chase increases frustration and blocks the character’s goal.

4. The hero assumes he’s in control of a situation, but learns he isn’t. His anger skyrockets.

5. Someone’s chasing your heroine, and she finds herself at the edge of a cliff. Does she jump and risk death or find another way of escape?

6. Answering the phone in the middle of the night. The caller breathes heavily, saying nothing or states in an eerie voice that he’s watching you.

7. A sharp knife pressing against your hero’s throat could cost him his life. How will he escape unscathed?

Give the reader a sense of trouble. Build the tension by upping the stakes and putting your characters in unexpected circumstances. The best scenes come about when every decision your character makes is bad. Whatever he does will cost him something.

Dialogue is a good way to show the emotional element and expose the internal conflict. What’s going on inside your character’s head during this intense situation? Some inner thoughts spill out in a heated discussion. Ramping up the drama and maintaining unresolved tension keeps readers intrigued.

Using the five senses is another great way to intensify dramatic tension. The smell of rubber burning, a sour taste of clabbered milk, the sound of a growl close by or a shot fired, seeing a shadow slip passed the window when you’re home alone, or touching the gooey slime on the cold doorknob.

Anytime one or more of these senses enters the picture, readers relate to what your character experiences. They keep turning the page until the risks subside and their desire for an acceptable end is in sight.

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

              Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

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The Power of Facial Expressions

Facial expressions speak louder than words, and yet, they don’t make a sound. In most cases, faces convey an approachable or unapproachable signal and can clarify whether people are happy, intrigued, afraid, or angry. Solemn looks can be more complicated and may show stress, plotting, deep thinking, or sadness. Only a few set expressions easily identify moods. Even a smile can come across as deceptive and filled with revenge.

Eyes play a significant role in reading attitudes. When people smile, their eyes brighten and may curve upward. The opposite happens with a frown. Rolling eyes indicate annoyance with another’s actions, but shifting eyes at a crucial moment could expose a lie. Wide eyes can withhold their blinks when tension rises, while uncertainty or fear holds them captive in a frozen stare.

Challenge: During a suspenseful scene in a movie theater, turn around and examine the audience’s expressions. Some may bite their fingernails. Hands might cover faces as they catch a peek between their fingers. Others slide down in their seats, squinting and waiting for the villain’s attack. Watch their actions, posture, and facial expressions and jot them down. This information will be an asset when describing a character’s emotions.

Furrowed brows with wrinkled foreheads may show displeasure, sadness, or worry, maybe even confusion, sympathy, or pain. However, used with red cheeks, flared nostrils, and tight lips, one can suspect anger or rage, especially if it comes with a fist punching a wall or the slamming of a door, and many other scenarios.

Every chapter in Character Expressions by Dahlia Evans gives examples of descriptive facial expressions in writing fiction, which helps engage the reader’s imaginations. Who knew there were so many ways to express moods or emotions, or that entire chapters could contain so much information?

Here are a few of the chapter titles from Dahlia’s book.

  • Frown
  • Glare
  • Grimace
  • Pout
  • Scowl
  • . . . and many more

Valerie Howard’s 1,000 Character Reactions is another great asset to a writer’s literary collection. She states your characters can do more than nod and sigh. If all your character does is smile through the entire story, where will the reader see conflict or tension? No one smiles all the time, so make sure there are other emotions involved.

Challenge: Stand in front of a mirror and think about how you’d respond in different situations. Describe your reaction to fear, surprise, shock, horror, sympathy, compassion, admiration, love, etc. Build a personal list of facial descriptions that you can refer to when writing a character’s silent response.

What first comes to mind when you see pursed lips, a clenched jaw, or the quivering chin? You see people at a distance and may not speak to them, but you read expressions every day without realizing it.

Challenge: Describe the mood of your character in each expression:

  • One eyebrow lifted, sporting a smirk
  • Color draining from one’s cheeks with eyes widened in a frozen stare
  • Slightly narrowed eyes while biting the lip
  • Blank expression and shifting eyes
  • Bright eyes and a big smile
  • Lowered brows, tight lips, and flared nostrils
  • Red face, glaring eyes, jutting jaw
  • Rolling eyes

Study and discover what’s behind a sneer, open mouth, or closed eyes. Not every facial expression is suspicious. Widened eyes give off the signal that you have nothing to hide. A flash of the eyebrows raising and lowering suggests familiarity or a sign of attraction or interest.

Have you ever heard of the Duchenne smile? According to www.scienceofpeople.com/microexpressions/ The Duchenne smile is a genuine smile that comes from true enjoyment and can be distinguished from a fake smile by the orbicularis oculi muscle, which forms crow’s feet wrinkles around the eyes. Who knew?

Facial expressions are part of life and a significant part of showing every character’s reactions, along with their body language. In writing, it’s imperative to show the correct facial responses and descriptions to match the intensity of the scene.

What expressions have you used when writing a suspenseful scene?

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

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Suspense = Uncertainty

Battered fingers dig into the edge of a balcony on the twentieth floor of a New York apartment building. The murderer smiles and steps closer. Dangling over a deep gorge and swift-flowing river, sweaty palms grip a fraying rope, muscles stretched to the max. Two miles from shore, a speed boat rams the trawler. The victim jumps free, but ocean waves swell and they spot a shark’s dorsal fin.

“Suspense is the lack of certainty . . . leaving the reader to wonder what will happen. It draws the reader into the story and creates a sense of momentum to the plot.”

Lori Jordan

Suspense is critical for our mystery, suspense, thriller genre. We want our readers to feel, taste, touch, smell, and hear uncertainty in our plot, from our characters, and within our dialogue. Make our readers care about our characters. Make them worry and fear the worst by ratcheting up the tension. The worse it is for our character, the more our readers worry.

Dictionary.com defines suspense as a state or condition of mental uncertainty, excitement, insecurity, or anxiety, the state or condition of being suspended.

To flesh out the meaning, consider these synonyms: confusion, doubt, insecurity, tension, dilemma, worry, and expectation.

Confusion – Two suspects seem innocent. A third looks guilty, but their alibi checks out. Could another suspect be lurking about or are one of the first two the culprit? Or perhaps the third one?

Doubt – The evidence appears solid, the suspects obvious, but a niggling in the back of the brain screams things are not as they seem.

Insecurity – In his last case, your character sent an innocent man to his death. The next step seems clear, but your character fears pushing forward with an accusation.

Tension – The stalker emerges from the shadows. Thunder explodes in the night sky and lightning reveals a face in the window. Communication from your Confidential Informant ceases. Are they deep undercover or have they been eliminated?

Dilemma – Your brother-in-law dines with another woman at a table for two in a dark corner of a high-end restaurant. Do you tell your sister? Wait for the police to arrest him for embezzlement? Allow the authorities to sort it out and let the truth slowly emerge?

Worry – The airplane should have landed by now. Your reliable friend is two hours late for the appointment. As the storm approaches, the phone lines are down and cell services cease. The tide rises and laps at the front steps.

Expectation – After giving a clear description, the police should make an arrest, but they don’t. Your friend must turn himself in, but they cross the border instead. Your co-worker swears he’s telling the truth, but you learn it’s a lie.

“Think about an expected outcome and flip it around. Maybe something bad happening ends up being a blessing in disguise. If you mix positive and negative foreshadowing, you will keep your readers on their toes, wondering what will come next and surprised by whatever it is.”

Bill Powers

But what if we incorporate these ideas and our story still seems to drag?

“The solution isn’t more action or violence. Action doesn’t create suspense, it resolves it, and excessive violence quickly becomes numbing. The solution is to rack up the tension and suspense by making more and bigger promises about problems to come – disasters that will devastate the hero and his allies, shatter his plans and bring him so low that he might never recover.”

Ian Irvine

Good mystery, suspense, and thrillers share a common trait––uncertainty. Weave it into our story and keep your readers turning pages. Let me know how it goes!

“Uncertainty is the lifeblood of suspense. . . .The longer we keep our reader guessing, the more attention they will pay to what they are reading.”

Writer’s Digest

Write well, my friends.

PJ Gover encourages her readers to live the thrill…one story at a time, whether through her devotionals or thrillers. She has received eleven writing awards including first place in the Write-to-Publish and North Carolina Christian Writers contests and a two-time winner in American Christian Fiction Writer’s First Impressions contest. Her one-year devotional book, Celebrate Thee Date, can be found at 4homestore.com/devotional-books.

A ranch in Texas serves as home base where she is currently working on a suspense novel. Offer her Mexican food or anything gluten-free and you’ll have a friend for life.

Jim Hart of Hartline Literary Agency represents PJ.

Connect with PJ at PJGover.com or facebook.com/pj.gover

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Suspenseful Scenes

Suspense is what keeps readers turning the page but writing a story without it can leave them feeling jilted. Your plot must be realistic and gripping and your characters well developed and relatable.

When writing a suspenseful scene, the description of your setting should add to the intensity and danger of the action taking place. Develop scenes in a way that your readers get a feel for the character’s fears and anxieties.

Choose your words wisely. It’s not the length of your descriptive words that make a scene suspenseful. It’s in the power of the words used. Here are some examples of different scenarios and questions readers might ask:

  1. Light from a single lamppost was absorbed by the thick haze hovering over the park, causing inky darkness along the path. An eerie silence sucked the breath from her lungs. Hair prickled and her palms grew sweaty. Terror twisted knots in the pit of her stomach.
    • Why was she in the park after dark? Was she being followed? Had she escaped an attacker and didn’t know which way to go? Did the anonymous call give orders to come alone or her child would die?
  2. Angry voices echoed from the depths of the abandoned corridor. A door slammed. Someone screamed, metal clanged, and a distant thud brought an abrupt silence — heavy footsteps, then the jarring sound of a chainsaw. 
    • Who was arguing? Who was hiding in the shadows listening? How many people were behind that closed door? What caused the thud? Had a body dropped to the floor? A chainsaw inside the building? Why?
  3. The crumpled note drifted to the floor like a feather, but its message stood out like neon lights. You’re Next.
    • What happened and why had she received a threatening note? Was someone watching her? Would she call the police? Was there anyone she could trust?

I’m sure you can imagine other scenes, and you have already written them into your manuscript. Which word choices did the best job of creating the scene and presenting the tension needed?

In the above scenarios, most readers would have an idea of what’s going on, but it’s hard to avoid the questions that pop into their minds while the action’s taking place. At the same time, you’re allowing readers to experience the building tension as they grow concerned for the safety of the characters they’ve connected with and care about.

Suspense can be built slowly by allowing it to offer a sense of foreboding or the author can jump right into action like the scenes above. Regardless of the pace, your story will grow more intense as imminent danger approaches, and you’ll deliver a quality suspense scene your readers can devour.

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

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