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Writing for YA

Writing a First Novel: Ten Mistakes Not to Make

There’s no one right way to write a novel, but there are plenty of wrong ways! Here’s a few common mistakes to steer clear of to make the path a little smoother.

Structure your novel.

It doesn’t matter if you’re a pantser or a plotter, your main character needs to have a compelling goal.

With my first try at a character driven book, my MC had plenty of internal motivation but no external motivation. Nailing down GMC, goal, motivation, conflict helped. Identify the GMC of a story before starting the first or second draft. Getting the GMC nailed down helps me keep my story on track and saves a lot of grief and time wasted rewriting.

Develop the characters.

Sometimes the story idea is fantastic and all is in place, but the characters fall flat. Characters should be relatable and realistic. One of my characters was meant to be crabby due to grief, but just came off as crabby and nothing else. Rewriting her wasn’t horribly hard, and the character is much more likable and relatable now.

Find the right point of view.

Try out different points of view. Choose the one that suits the story best, or choose the POV that works best for you as a writer. Originally, I almost always wrote my fiction in first person, but it was short fiction and not a novel.

I got advice from a writing mentor and was told to write in third person past.

Unfortunately, third person past didn’t work for me. The stories were okay, but even after writing complete novels in third person, something wasn’t right. I rewrote all my books into first person past and it was like breathing clean air. It would have been much easier to write a few chapters in different POVs and pick the best one from the start.

A different book may require a different POV from your usual, so don’t be afraid to test out the first chapter in various POVs before settling on one.

Don’t head hop.

Stay in one character’s point of view during a single scene. Omniscient POV and head hopping are two different things. Study up and learn the difference before using this as an excuse.

Don’t write about a topic you hate to research.

You would think this would be obvious, however it was not. I wanted to write an emotional story about grief. In order to do that, I needed to research medical conditions. I love to research all sorts of things, but death is not one of them. However, my heart wanted to write a book to comfort, so if I considered my goal, the research was tolerable.

Keep yourself organized.

Use a running list and/or pictures of people, settings, and items important to your story to help write consistent descriptions. Those blue eyes turning brown halfway through a manuscript is a common problem. If you have a series, you can keep a story Bible. This is a document to keep all the details straight.

Make a timeline.

If the story takes place over an extended period of time, evade headaches and make a timeline. This way strange weather anomalies such as snowfall in May and other time bending occurrences can be avoided.

Ask for feedback from the right sources.

Find some people who can provide useful feedback and encouragement.

Don’t share your work with the wrong people. Do not take to heart advice from people who do not read in your genre.

Shun Negative Nellies who have nothing good to say about anything. Constructive criticism is the only useful criticism.

The ideal writing buddies give useful feedback and do it in a respectful way.

Don’t query too soon.

When is too soon? That’s hard to say. Usually, it’s not wise to query your first novel, but there are always exceptions. This is rare.

I queried too soon, but once I realized my mistake, I’d lost those opportunities.

If you’re not sure, enter a few contests that provide critique-type feedback or use a critiquing service outside of the people who love you. Anonymous services sometimes provide a bit more honesty than your writing friends.

Trust your heart.

Don’t try to write a story you don’t love. It will show. Writing to the market may seem like a good idea, but if the author doesn’t feel connected to the characters, the reader won’t either. Writing a novel length work is a long-term commitment. Love the story and characters enough to stick with it.

Do you have any tips or experiences to share? Leave a comment.

Donna Jo Stone writes YA contemporary novels about tough issues but always ends the stories with a note of hope. She blogs at donnajostone.com.

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Common Mistakes I See When Proofreading: Vocabulary, Part 2

To Hyphenate or Not to Hyphenate…

How do you feel about hyphens? Do you use them a lot? Never? Do you sort of close your eyes and randomly stick them in between a couple of words because you think maybe once you saw it written that way?

Hyphens are confusing for many people when they write, because we don’t really understand the rules for using them. Here are a few sets of words with and without hyphens. Can you spot the differences?

  • Resign vs. re-sign
  • Extracurricular vs. extra-curricular
  • Low grade vs. low-grade

…Or, How to Avoid Miscommunicating Your Meaning

Resign vs. Re-sign.

  • “Resign” means to give up a position. I resigned from my teaching job because of COVID.
  • “Re-sign” means to sign again. I had to re-sign the documents because the agent lost the originals.

You can see how a missing hyphen could really mess up the meaning of your sentence.

All of the ballots had to be resigned because they were rained on and the ink ran.

Wait, the ballots were resigned? Does that mean that they were thrown out? What about my vote?!

Oh, you mean they need to be re-signed, as in signed again. Phew! A much easier solution.

Extracurricular vs. extra-curricular

With extracurricular vs. extra-curricular, the hyphen is just unnecessary. The prefix “extra” can be added to words without using a hyphen. In fact, the majority of prefixes and suffixes don’t require the use of a hyphen. Here’s a list.

Low grade vs. low-grade

Let’s look at that last example in a sentence.

  1. The baby had a low grade fever, so his mom decided to keep him home from day care.
  2. The baby had a low-grade fever, so his mom decided to keep him home from day care.

While this may not seem that confusing because people often know what you mean when you say a “low-grade” fever, the hyphen here is necessary, because you are describing the fever, not the grade. Without the hyphen, it seems like you’re describing the grade and saying that that is what is low; what you mean is that the fever grade is low.

Hyphen Rules

1. Use a hyphen to join two words that are meant to function as a single adjective before a noun (like with “low-grade fever”).

Ex. He gave me chocolate-covered peanuts for Valentine’s Day.

(* The adjective “chocolate-covered” describes the peanuts.)

1a. Unless, however, your adjective comes after the noun in your sentence. Then you don’t need a hyphen.

Ex. The peanuts were chocolate covered so I didn’t know what they were. Unfortunately, I’m allergic to peanuts.

(* Because “chocolate covered” comes after the noun it describes, the hyphen isn’t needed.) 

1b. Don’t use hyphens with “very” or with adverbs that end in “-ly.”

Incorrect: I prefer a very-hot soup when it’s cold outside.

Incorrect: His extremely-strict policies caused the students to dislike him.

2. Don’t use hyphens with prefixes or suffixes.

2a. Except with these prefixes: “ex-“, “self-“, and “all-“.

Ex. The rookie was very self-conscious about her performance on her first day. 

2b. And with the suffix “-elect.”

Ex. The mayor-elect celebrated a victory over their rival. 

2c. And always with a prefix + a capitalized word, or a prefix + digits/letters.

Ex. We would like school to start in mid-September, but it often begins before Labor Day.

Ex. In the mid-1960s, the hippie style was popular with many young people, which included tie-dye t-shirts.

3. Use hyphens when you spell out numbers.

Ex. Our two-year-old child is really into dinosaurs.

(*But no hyphen in: Our child is two years old.) 

Ex. After forty-seven years, we finally discovered the treasure our grandparents promised was hidden in the house.

4. Use hyphens to resolve potential confusion in a sentence.

Ex. He had a concealed weapons permit. vs. He had a concealed-weapons permit.

(Was the weapons permit concealed or did he have a permit for a concealed weapon? Neither is wrong, but this is where hyphens help to clarify your meaning.)

5. Don’t guess with hyphen use! Look it up in your favorite dictionary or in a style guide, such as The Chicago Manual of Style.

How About You?

Do you struggle with hyphens? Is there a word that you always hyphenate (or never hyphenate), and now you’re confused? I used to hyphenate “e-mail” all the time, but apparently “email” is more common. Although Merriam-Webster recognizes both, they put the hyphen in as the default. Hmmm. Hyphens are tricky!

Dayna Betz is a full-time freelancer providing proofreading and editing services to help writers put their best foot forward. She also enjoys reading and writing book reviews. Head over to her site to learn more: https://betzliterary.com.

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Common Mistakes I See When Proofreading: Vocabulary, Part 1

Vocabulary Mistakes

I’ve been proofreading a pretty wide variety of material lately—master’s dissertations, personal letters to family, freshman film class essays, presentation notes and slides, white papers for businesses, formal proposals, and book manuscripts. These arrive in my inbox at varying degrees of “finished.” You can usually tell when someone has already taken the time to proofread their document before they share it with me for my final proofread. That doesn’t mean it’s perfect, though!

Even in “proofed and polished” documents, I will usually find errors in simple vocabulary. Sometimes, it’s pretty obvious that auto-correct got the best of someone since it says “bacon” instead of “become” in the middle of a sentence about their goals for after graduate school. Another common one is typos, which might mean that there’s an extra space or extra letter or a preposition was skipped. The most common mistakes, however, are homophones.

Frequent Fliers

Do you remember what a homophone is? Homophones are words that have the same (or almost the same) pronunciation, but have different meanings and different spellings. A fairly common one that you’re probably familiar with is there vs. their vs. they’re. It kind of looks bad if you mess that up, but how do you avoid it? Maybe you’ve seen this graphic that helps you remember which one to use:

Or, if you have this one nailed down, here’s a list of ten other common errors that I’ve come across.

Homophones and Other Common Errors

Here are a few common homophones, and a couple other types of errors, that I see misused quite often. Do any of these trip you up?

  1. Accept vs. except
  • Accept: I accept the roses that the stranger hands me.
  • Except: He is smiling, except something doesn’t seem to be quite right.
  1. Affect vs. effect
  • Affect (produce an emotional response) 
    • The wacky Mole Day outfit affects the way that I see my teacher.
  • Effect (cause and effect) 
    • The teacher’s wacky Mole Day outfit had the effect of distracting the entire class.
  1. Allude vs. elude
  • Allude: I alluded to the fact that I knew his secret.
  • Elude: I ran behind the building to elude my pursuers.
  1. Everyday vs. every day
  • Everyday (adjective): Putting away my child’s shoes is an everyday activity.
  • Every day: Every day at 3:00 pm, I sit down to have a cup of tea.
  1. Illicit vs. elicit
  • Illicit: The journalist wrote a story about the illicit mafia activity in her town.
  • Elicit: She asked questions of dangerous people, hoping to elicit exciting details in order to write a front-page story.
  1. Than vs. then
  • Than (comparison): This piece of pie is larger than the other.
  • Then (sequence): I ate the pie, then I had to confess that I had finished the whole thing.
  1. A lot vs. alot
  • A lot: Using “alot” in a sentence is always incorrect, yet people do it a lot.

*”Alot” as a single word is not a word.

  1. Canceled vs. cancelled
  • Canceled: “I canceled my flight to London due to COVID,” said the businessman from New York.
  • Cancelled: “I cancelled my flight to New York due to COVID,” said the businesswoman from London.

*The double -l is the UK-approved spelling.

  1. Into vs. in to
  • Into (movement/direction) 
    • I will get into trouble if I don’t tell the truth.
  • In to (position) 
    • I put the kitten in the basket to hide it.
  1. Onto vs. on to
  • Onto (preposition) 
    • She got onto the bus at the last second.
  • On to (adverb + preposition) 
    • She needs to get on to the next phase of her project.

Keep these tips in mind the next time you’re preparing your own manuscript to send off to your editor.

What do you think?

What are some other tricky vocabulary pairs that trip you up? How do you keep them straight?

Dayna Betz is a full-time freelancer providing proofreading and editing services to help writers put their best foot forward. She also enjoys reading and writing book reviews. Head over to her site to learn more: https://betzliterary.com.

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History in the Making

Notes from a Contest Judge

Have you ever entered your work in a writing contest? These contests are organized by organizations like the American Fiction Writers of America (www.acfw.com) and Blue Ridge Mountains Christian Writers Conference (www.blueridgeconference.com).

There are categories for each genre, so you can submit and be judged against other historical fiction writers. Some of you probably just shuddered when I said be judged. But letting others look at your work is one of the best ways to improve it. Plus, this helps you develop thick skin, a must in this business.

I always spot someone new to writing through a few telltale signs when I judge a contest. These speed bumps slow the story for me, and will eventually do the same for an agent or publisher.

Here are some common mistakes to avoid:

  1. The beginning of a new chapter, or a new scene, should not be indented. Flush left treatment is the general norm for submission.
  2. An ellipsis can express a mood change, hesitation, or a thought that trails off … Think of it as a word and leave a space before and after the three dots.
  3. Hyphens, en dash, and em dash are horizontal lines of varying lengths and it matters how you use them.
    • A hyphen is the shortest line and used to generally hyphenate two or more words when they come before a noun they modify. They are not interchangeable with dashes.
    • The en dash is used when you refer to a span of dates or numbers, like pages 10-20.
    • The em dash creates a strong break in a sentence. It can be used in a pair¾like parenthesis (as I did here)¾to add more information. Although, the sentence should be able to stand alone without them and the extra info between them. You also use the em dash to detach the end of a sentence from the main body.
  4. Capitalize the first letter in dialogue when it begins mid-sentence.
    • Johnny narrowed his eyes and spat on the ground before adding, “You just stay out of my way.”

Also, read your work out loud. You’ll trip over sentences that need to be fixed and catch more typos. Enter the cleanest copy you can so you don’t lose points. Simple errors could cost you the contest.

There are many great contests for unpublished authors and a Goggle search will list several. But here are a few I know of:

*ACFW First Impressions Contest is open now and you can have your first five pages evaluated by professionals.

*ACFW Genesis Contest has many genres to enter for fiction writers and you get unbiased feedback from the judges. It opens January 2.

*BRMCWC Foundations Award is now open.

Visit their websites, look over the guidelines, and submit your work. Finalists and winners often draw the attention of agents and publishers.

Good luck becoming an award winning author!

K. D. Holmberg is an author, blogger, and freelance writer. She is a member of ACFW, Word Weavers International, and a founding member of the Jerry Jenkins Writers Guild. She is represented by Hartline Literary Agency. A retired flight attendant, she has traveled and lived all over the globe. She and her husband, Keith, love to golf and live in South Carolina. You can find more about her: Facebook @authorkdholmberg, twitter @kdeniseholmberg, and website authorkdholmberg.com/