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Courting the Muse

How to Level Up Your Descriptions Through the Ancient Art of Ekphrasis

Some writers are blessed with a vivid visual imagination. Just by willing it, they can render scenes in their mind’s eye with the pixel-perfect fidelity of CGI. They see their characters with photographic precision, from the slope of their shoulders to the snarled ends of their hair. Their settings have the texture and specificity of real asphalt and dirt.

I’ve always envied this ability, but I can’t say I’ve ever enjoyed it myself. In fact, I’ve been cursed with an incredibly impoverished visual imagination. Even as a reader, I never instinctually convert the sentences I encounter into pictures in my head. Learning that a character is “blonde”, or a farmhouse “weathered” just gives me an abstract bit of info to file away— no different than being told that she’s a Sagittarius or that it was built in 1897.

Despite my inability to conjure up mental images, however, I’ve never been told that my writing comes across as excessively abstract. In fact, I’ve been praised for the precision and evocativeness of my descriptions. I’m determined not to let my lack of visual imagination prevent pictorially gifted readers from connecting with my work. That’s why I’ve learned to work around my inability to see pictures inside my head.

What’s my secret for faking it until I make it? I think of it as a spin on the ancient technique of ekphrasis, from the Greek for “calling an inanimate object by name”. The etymology makes it sound incredibly poetic, and it’s true that ekphrasis has been used to greatest effect in verse. But at its core, this rhetorical device just means to describe a work of visual art in detail. As an example, you might look at John Keats’s “Ode on a Grecian Urn,” possibly the most famous instance of ekphrastic poetry in the Anglophone tradition. But I prefer John Ashberry’s “Self-Portrait in a Convex Mirror,” based on a 16th-century painting by Parmigianino. It opens with the following lines:

As Parmigianino did it, the right hand

Bigger than the head, thrust at the viewer

And swerving easily away, as though to protect

What it advertises. A few leaden panes, old beams,

Fur, pleated muslin, a coral ring run together

In a movement supporting the face, which swims

Toward and away like the hand

Except that it is in repose….

I’ve never written ekphrastic poetry myself. But to work around my lack of visual imagination, I use a trick that feels analogous to ekphrasis: I write using reference images, much the way an artist might consult them when they sketch. You see, my problem lies in mentally conjuring up images from the blank canvas inside my head — not in translating extant images into language. That means that, if I want to describe something accurately, I need to be looking at it, the way an artist might consult a photo to get a pose just right.

Sometimes I do write about a work of visual art, in the traditional ekphrastic mode: I might model a bit of scenery off a landscape painting, or give a character the face of a marble bust. Most of the time, though, I just use a photo from the internet to get a detail like the right texture of driftwood, the exact shape of a snarl.

Even if you’re not cursed with my particular brand of imaginative inability, give this spin on ekphrasis a try: it’ll make your visual descriptions that much sharper. And if you find yourself wading deeper into the art historical archive in search of references, you just might find yourself inspired to write a whole story — or a poem — based on a painting.

Lucia Tang is a writer for Reedsy, a marketplace that connects self-publishing authors with the book industry’s best editors, designers, and marketers. To work on the site’s free historical character name generators, she draws on her knowledge of Chinese, Latin, and Old Irish —  learned as a PhD candidate in history at UC Berkeley. You can read more of her work on the Reedsy Discovery blog, or follow her on Twitter at @lqtang.

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Mystery/Thriller/Suspense

The Power of Facial Expressions

Facial expressions speak louder than words, and yet, they don’t make a sound. In most cases, faces convey an approachable or unapproachable signal and can clarify whether people are happy, intrigued, afraid, or angry. Solemn looks can be more complicated and may show stress, plotting, deep thinking, or sadness. Only a few set expressions easily identify moods. Even a smile can come across as deceptive and filled with revenge.

Eyes play a significant role in reading attitudes. When people smile, their eyes brighten and may curve upward. The opposite happens with a frown. Rolling eyes indicate annoyance with another’s actions, but shifting eyes at a crucial moment could expose a lie. Wide eyes can withhold their blinks when tension rises, while uncertainty or fear holds them captive in a frozen stare.

Challenge: During a suspenseful scene in a movie theater, turn around and examine the audience’s expressions. Some may bite their fingernails. Hands might cover faces as they catch a peek between their fingers. Others slide down in their seats, squinting and waiting for the villain’s attack. Watch their actions, posture, and facial expressions and jot them down. This information will be an asset when describing a character’s emotions.

Furrowed brows with wrinkled foreheads may show displeasure, sadness, or worry, maybe even confusion, sympathy, or pain. However, used with red cheeks, flared nostrils, and tight lips, one can suspect anger or rage, especially if it comes with a fist punching a wall or the slamming of a door, and many other scenarios.

Every chapter in Character Expressions by Dahlia Evans gives examples of descriptive facial expressions in writing fiction, which helps engage the reader’s imaginations. Who knew there were so many ways to express moods or emotions, or that entire chapters could contain so much information?

Here are a few of the chapter titles from Dahlia’s book.

  • Frown
  • Glare
  • Grimace
  • Pout
  • Scowl
  • . . . and many more

Valerie Howard’s 1,000 Character Reactions is another great asset to a writer’s literary collection. She states your characters can do more than nod and sigh. If all your character does is smile through the entire story, where will the reader see conflict or tension? No one smiles all the time, so make sure there are other emotions involved.

Challenge: Stand in front of a mirror and think about how you’d respond in different situations. Describe your reaction to fear, surprise, shock, horror, sympathy, compassion, admiration, love, etc. Build a personal list of facial descriptions that you can refer to when writing a character’s silent response.

What first comes to mind when you see pursed lips, a clenched jaw, or the quivering chin? You see people at a distance and may not speak to them, but you read expressions every day without realizing it.

Challenge: Describe the mood of your character in each expression:

  • One eyebrow lifted, sporting a smirk
  • Color draining from one’s cheeks with eyes widened in a frozen stare
  • Slightly narrowed eyes while biting the lip
  • Blank expression and shifting eyes
  • Bright eyes and a big smile
  • Lowered brows, tight lips, and flared nostrils
  • Red face, glaring eyes, jutting jaw
  • Rolling eyes

Study and discover what’s behind a sneer, open mouth, or closed eyes. Not every facial expression is suspicious. Widened eyes give off the signal that you have nothing to hide. A flash of the eyebrows raising and lowering suggests familiarity or a sign of attraction or interest.

Have you ever heard of the Duchenne smile? According to www.scienceofpeople.com/microexpressions/ The Duchenne smile is a genuine smile that comes from true enjoyment and can be distinguished from a fake smile by the orbicularis oculi muscle, which forms crow’s feet wrinkles around the eyes. Who knew?

Facial expressions are part of life and a significant part of showing every character’s reactions, along with their body language. In writing, it’s imperative to show the correct facial responses and descriptions to match the intensity of the scene.

What expressions have you used when writing a suspenseful scene?

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

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Magazine and Freelance

Avoid these Common Article-Writing Mistakes

As the editor of Reach Out, Columbia magazine, I’ve had the pleasure of coaching new (and seasoned) writers for more than ten years. Every month we work together to produce informative, engaging, and inspiring material for our readers. As I review submissions, I often see one or more of these common mistakes:

Common article-writing mistakes

1. Beginning at the beginning

It seems logical, when writing a feature article, to begin at the beginning of someone’s life. That’s where it all began, right? And the details are so fascinating and relevant. Unfortunately a reader doesn’t care about the details until they care about the subject.

We have to hook ‘em first, show them why they should care, then fill in the back story. Twentieth-century filmmaker Billy Wilder described this technique: “You grab them by the throat, their heart is beating, and you never let go.”

Instead of beginning at a subject’s birth, choose the point of highest conflict in their story and dive in. Once you’ve captured your reader’s attention, you can flesh out the details and the back story.

2. Telling not showing.

I find it much easier to rattle off a list of details rather than take the time to set the stage. But whether we’re writing a novel or penning an article, we must create a setting, provide sensory details, and showcase the story.

Dialogue is a great way to inject a reader into the scene by showing. Here’s an example:

“Mom,” Simpson said, raising his eyes and staring deeply into hers, “I’m going to New York to follow my dream.” He swallowed hard, then spoke again. “I hope you’ll give me your blessing.”

Simpson Jackson’s mother knew her response would impact their relationship for the rest of their lives.

3. Omitting description.

In today’s image-driven world, we rely heavily on graphics. We know the art director plans to use photos of our subject in the layout, so we skip the physical description in the story. Why waste precious words on the person’s salt and pepper crew cut or Bambi eyes?

Weaving physical descriptions into our narratives reinforces the graphics and spotlights details we want our readers to notice. Mentioning a subject’s “kind eyes” or “quick smile” also provides welcome description for visually-impaired readers and those listening to an article rather than reading it.

4. Failing to answer the readers’ questions.

Before I submit an article, I run it through the Have I Answered All My Readers’ Questions? test. This is an important step, especially if I’m very familiar with the subject or ministry. Just because I know the vernacular doesn’t mean everyone does.

Set aside your writer perspective and read the article as someone who knows nothing about the topic or person. Make sure you’ve included details that might answer their questions. Some examples might be:

  • How is this project funded?
  • How can I learn more about it?
  • How can I get involved?

5. Failing to define acronyms and jargon.

In recent days we’ve learned about the CDC, PPE, and LMNOP (oops, that was kindergarten). Although terms may be familiar to us, we can’t assume everyone knows what they mean. Unless it’s a universally-understood acronym, spell it out the first time and include the acronym in parenthesis immediately after, i.e. “the Centers for Disease Control (CDC) said recently . . .” or “My WIP (work in progress) is coming along nicely.” Once you’ve defined it, you’re free to use the acronym in place of the complete name.

The next time you write an article, edit your piece with these common article writing mistakes in mind. If your work avoids all five, you’ll provide your editor with an article that’s clear, enjoyable, and RTP (ready to publish)!

Lori Hatcher is the editor of Reach Out, Columbia magazine and the author of several devotional books including Refresh Your Faith – Uncommon Devotions from Every Book of the Bible and Hungry for God … Starving for Time, Five-Minute Devotions for Busy Women, winner of the 2016 Christian Small Publisher Book of the Year award. Her most recent book, A blogger, writing instructor, and inspirational speaker, her goal is to help women connect with God in the craziness of life. You’ll find her pondering the marvelous and the mundane on her blog, Hungry for God. . . Starving for Time. Connect with her on Facebook, Twitter (@LoriHatcher2), or Pinterest (Hungry for God).

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Romancing Your Story

“Setting” the Romance

What do you think about when you think of romance? Oh sure, there are the typical things like boy meets girl, a dinner date or dinner and a movie. You may fantasize about what the hero or the lady look like, their personalities, their similarities and differences. As a writer, you’ll be thinking about how they’ll meet and what kind(s) of conflict will affect their relationship, as well as how they will overcome these conflicts to come together in a forever love.

But have you ever considered how your setting can enhance the romance? Consider this—when you think about what kind of romance you’d like, don’t you envision where the romance will take place? And you probably envision more than one setting for more than one date.

Building a description of the setting can help create romance.

Imagine: dinner at a top-notch seafood restaurant on the pier at a table by a window with a view of the moonlight shining upon the ocean. That view is enticing, so much so that after dinner, the lady and her date wander down to the beach, remove their shoes, and walk barefoot and hand-in-hand on the beach near the water’s edge. They feel a strong chemistry between them and little sparks shoot through their hands and up their arms at the physical contact of holding hands. They continue to take turns talking about themselves—getting to know one another.

Eventually, they know they have to go back the way they came. He has to drive her home. The night won’t last forever, but neither of them wants it to end. They look up at the bright, full moon and comment on the beauty of it as it shines upon the water. They breathe in the cool, salty air, then the hero turns to the lady, comments on her beauty and brushes some loose strands of hair from her face, places his hand on her cheek, then lowers his lips to hers for their first kiss.

You can take it from there, but do you see how the beach, the ocean, the moon and moonlight all add to the romance of the scene? You can take any scene you want, envision it in your mind and bring it to life in a way that enhances the romance or even causes the romance between your hero and lady to begin. Your settings can play an important role in your story. Don’t neglect them.

Some stories include a setting so well developed it almost becomes a character in the story. Be sure to use your settings to enhance the attraction, the feelings, the romance of your romantic stories.

Kelly F. Barr lives in Lancaster County, Pennsylvania. She is married and has three sons. She writes historical romance. She has also been a blogger for ten years, and every Friday, you can find her Flash Fiction stories posted for your reading pleasure. She loves her family, including the family dog, books, walks, and chai lattes.

You can find her online at:

Website: https://kellyfbarr.com/

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Mystery/Thriller/Suspense

Body Language in Writing

Everyone uses body language in one way or another. Talking with a friend, in a business meeting, or at a ball game, the gestures, postures, and movements of our bodies and facial expressions are telltale signs of who we are, our mood, how we feel healthwise or about an issue, and what we think.

We form tightened lips, narrowed eyes, make fists, throw hands in the air, and shuffle our feet. We talk with our hands, cover our face, rake fingers through our hair, etc. We are human, and we are constantly expressive.

In real life, if more than fifty percent of non-verbal communication is through body language, then it goes to reason that when we write our protagonists and antagonists should do the same. How dull would a book be without noticing shifty eyes, crossed arms, or flared nostrils?

By using body language in writing, we are more likely to show and not tell, thus giving readers a more accurate picture of the character’s state of mind and the tension taking place. We draw the reader in when we use realistic and believable behaviors, just be sure to use them in moderation. Too many will slow your story down.

Example of overuse: Roy’s face reddened, lips tightened, his knuckles whitened in clenched fists, and he gritted his teeth when his boss gave the promotion to his partner. He stormed from the room and slammed the door, remembering the pistol in his brief case.

Better: Heat rushed into Roy’s face when his boss gave the promotion to his partner. He clenched his jaw to keep from saying too much and left the room. The door slammed behind him as his focus lands on the briefcase under his desk, housing a Glock.

Roy’s body language describes his attitude and mood. The tension thickened, and the stakes rose the moment a weapon was mentioned. Most readers can tell something bad is about to happen; thus, the suspense intensifies. Let them bask in the non-verbal clues the character reveals and keep them turning the page.

Using body language sounds simple, but it’s not as easily written. Here are a few more examples of suspicious, angry, or aggitated body language. We must avoid repetition of the same gestures in our writing to avoid losing the readers interest. 

Crossed the arms                                 Tightened lips                         Straddled a chair

Narrowed eyes                                    Twisted lips                             Looked away

Jutted chin                                          Clenched fists                         Lowered eyebrows

Crouched down                                  Confrontational                       Rolled eyes

Darting glance                                     Grimacing                               Shaking fist

Twitching trigger finger                      Lying                                       Sneering or Smirk

            Remember, use body language where it will pack a punch in the story and add depth to the character’s dialogue. Most importantly, keep the reader turning the page, or their body language will toss the book aside.     

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

            Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

Visit her:

Website: lorettaeidson.com

Facebok: loretta.eidson.7 

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Mystery/Thriller/Suspense

Pacing: The Tortoise or the Hare?

What’s the secret to creating a book worthy of catching an agent’s eye? Worthy of turning an acquisition editor’s head? Worthy of securing a publishing contract?

Pacing.

The speed at which the action takes place in our story is one of a myriad of literary devices that informs all writing including our mystery, thriller, and suspense novels. Correct pacing can drive our story to the next level, to the top of the pile.

How do I handle my story’s action?

The hare demands pounding hearts, stolen breaths, and jacked-up pulses at every turn. Throw in scenes with car chases, a killer stalking our hero through darkened alleyways, or a bomb disabled at the last second. For good measure include the click of the action sliding back on a Glock, the creak of a wooden staircase, or the gurgle of a faucet running in an abandoned cottage. Add a cup of tea laced with strychnine, a virus released into the air ducts, or a poisonous needle prick on a crowded subway.

“If you’re writing a thriller, mystery…you’d better keep things moving rapidly for the reader. Quick pacing is vital in certain genres. It hooks readers, creates tension, deepens the drama, and speeds things along.”

Nancy Kress

We want the reader gripping the edges of our book, turning page after page into the wee hours of the morning.

But the tortoise whispers, “Slow down.” Give our protagonist time for processing clues. Whether it be with a trusted confidant, behind a microscope, in front of an evidence board, or beside a crackling fire in the drawing room. Who are the suspects? What is the motive? When did the offense occur? Where do the clues lead? Why murder? How was the crime committed?

Which pacing is better, the tortoise or the hare?

Pacing is all about balance. Correct balance provides variety and keeps the reader hooked. It involves more than racing hearts and tingling spines versus strolling through daisy-dotted fields.

According to Healthline.com, adrenaline makes the heart beat faster, increases blood flow to the brain and muscles, and stimulates the body to make sugar for fuel. The body responds so fast that you might not fully process what is happening.

While that may please the writer in us, constant action might prevent the reader from fully processing and delighting in our well-plotted story. We don’t want our reader dozing off, but we can let them breathe.

Pacing depends on the story you’re telling. Suspense and thrillers tend toward fast-paced, mysteries come in at a slower pace––think Sherlock Holmes.

Our question becomes not the tortoise or the hare, but rather how do we join both voices to create a satisfying read where dangling threads are knotted and setups are paid off.

What is your story’s goal? What does your genre require?

Read best-selling authors in your genre and analyze how they pace their story. Create a template of the plot. You’ll find they spread out the fast-paced action with more mundane activities.

Your reader’s adrenaline surges with shorter sentences and chapters. Short sentences tighten the action. Short chapters heighten the pace. Keep the action quick and physical. Pick concrete words and active voice. Call on machine-gun dialogue. Crank up the tension with hard consonants, such as: crashed into the cold night. Action-packed cliffhangers keep the pages turning.

Longer chapters and sentences let the reader bask in the ebb and flow of our prose, the nuances of our story, and the witty repartee between characters. If action is more cerebral––analyzing clues, pondering results, consulting colleagues––the reader can drop those shoulders, sip hot coffee, and enjoy the read. Flowery descriptions utilizing present participles and gerunds slow the reading experience as well as the action. Dialogue reflecting the slower pace employs complex sentences and longer action beats. Soft consonants––gentle breezes on a summer morn––lighten the mood and invite the reader to saunter, rather than rush, through the story. A slower pace doesn’t mean anesthetizing the reader. We still want hanging cliffs and turning pages.

The tortoise and hare must work together, but one or the other will claim center stage depending on your genre. Correct pacing keeps our readers entertained, turning pages, and coming back for more. That’s what we all want.

Write well, my friends.

PJ Gover encourages her readers to live the thrill…one story at a time, whether through her devotionals or thrillers. She has received eight writing awards including first place in American Christian Fiction Writer’s First Impressions contest and the first place Tar Heel Award from the North Carolina Christian Writers. Write to Publish recognized her second novel with their first place Blue Seal Award. Her one-year devotional book, Celebrate Thee Date, can be found at 4homestore.com. She is represented by Jim Hart of Hartline Literary Agency.

A ranch in Texas serves as home base where she is currently working on a suspense novel set in west Texas. Offer her Mexican food or anything gluten-free and you’ll have a friend for life.

Connect with PJ at her website or Facebook.

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Fantasy-Sci-Fi

The Beginner’s Guide to Props – Using Them to Show Character

You know the phrase, all an actor needs is an empty room and a script? I’ve heard that idea dispelled by an acting coach. Why? Because actors need something to react to, something to work with. A good actor uses the space around him to define his character, personality, and intentions.

In the same way, a good writer puts characters in environments that show their personality, without telling their intentions.

When it comes to fantasy and science fiction, this is especially important. In past centuries writers could get away with long pages of exposition, but in today’s Netflix era, where the next episode is just seconds away, we need readers to want to turn pages faster than Netflix changes episodes.

How to do so? Easter eggs. Easter eggs are a simple way to reference – or show – something deeper within a scene, without ever mentioning it.

Let’s say your character is sitting in the woods. They’re not just any woods, but woods you’ve taken hours to create and build into your fantasy. Your character sits down on a clean, expensive blanket. He or she opens a leather bag and takes a glass bottle full of your world’s equivalent to a specialty drink. They open a fiction novel with a title correlating to something they’d be interested in. In your select sentences of narrative, you mention that it’s morning and there’s a warm breeze.

Based on the above, what do you we know about your character?

  • He’s rich, or at least has high quality taste (expensive blanket, specialty drink in a glass bottle).
  • He’s interested in _____ type of pleasure reading (based on the title you choose for the book).
  • He’s an early riser and appreciates the small pleasures of a morning sunrise on a warm day.

What if we changed the props? How could something as simple as props show the depth of your character? Let’s give it a try.

Your character sits on the ground, ignoring the muddy leaves. He pulls a tattered blanket around his shoulders and a plastic, battered water bottle from a used backpack. Finally, he grabs a book with the title of a difficult school subject, and opens to the first, underlined page.

This time we could deduce:

  • He’s not bothered by dirt, or is too concerned with other things to focus on where he sits.
  • He doesn’t have much money.
  • He’s willing to spend what he does have to further his own study, and either doesn’t worry about the book being new, has used it extensively, or simply can’t afford something nice.

Depending on your specific fantasy setup, you can further play around with these props. Make the drink relate to some aspect of your world, show the bag was made from nearly extinct dragon skin, etc. A few, purposeful props can give countless insights into your character.

What types of props show your character’s motives? Let me know in the comments!

Sarah Rexford is a Marketing Content Writer, working with brands to grow their audience reach. She studied Strategic Communications at Cornerstone University and focused on writing during her time there, completing two full-length manuscripts while a full-time student. Currently she trains under best-selling author Jerry Jenkins in his Your Novel Blueprint course and is actively seeking publication for two books.

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Mystery/Thriller/Suspense

Suspenseful Scenes

Suspense is what keeps readers turning the page but writing a story without it can leave them feeling jilted. Your plot must be realistic and gripping and your characters well developed and relatable.

When writing a suspenseful scene, the description of your setting should add to the intensity and danger of the action taking place. Develop scenes in a way that your readers get a feel for the character’s fears and anxieties.

Choose your words wisely. It’s not the length of your descriptive words that make a scene suspenseful. It’s in the power of the words used. Here are some examples of different scenarios and questions readers might ask:

  1. Light from a single lamppost was absorbed by the thick haze hovering over the park, causing inky darkness along the path. An eerie silence sucked the breath from her lungs. Hair prickled and her palms grew sweaty. Terror twisted knots in the pit of her stomach.
    • Why was she in the park after dark? Was she being followed? Had she escaped an attacker and didn’t know which way to go? Did the anonymous call give orders to come alone or her child would die?
  2. Angry voices echoed from the depths of the abandoned corridor. A door slammed. Someone screamed, metal clanged, and a distant thud brought an abrupt silence — heavy footsteps, then the jarring sound of a chainsaw. 
    • Who was arguing? Who was hiding in the shadows listening? How many people were behind that closed door? What caused the thud? Had a body dropped to the floor? A chainsaw inside the building? Why?
  3. The crumpled note drifted to the floor like a feather, but its message stood out like neon lights. You’re Next.
    • What happened and why had she received a threatening note? Was someone watching her? Would she call the police? Was there anyone she could trust?

I’m sure you can imagine other scenes, and you have already written them into your manuscript. Which word choices did the best job of creating the scene and presenting the tension needed?

In the above scenarios, most readers would have an idea of what’s going on, but it’s hard to avoid the questions that pop into their minds while the action’s taking place. At the same time, you’re allowing readers to experience the building tension as they grow concerned for the safety of the characters they’ve connected with and care about.

Suspense can be built slowly by allowing it to offer a sense of foreboding or the author can jump right into action like the scenes above. Regardless of the pace, your story will grow more intense as imminent danger approaches, and you’ll deliver a quality suspense scene your readers can devour.

Loretta Eidson writes romantic suspense. She has won and been a finalist in several writing contests, including first place in romantic suspense in the Foundations Awards at the 2018 Blue Ridge Mountain Christian Writers Conference, a finalist in ACFW’s 2018 Genesis, was a finalist in the 2018 Fabulous Five, and a double finalist in the 2017 Daphne du Maurier Award for Excellence.

Loretta lives in North Mississippi with her husband Kenneth, a retired Memphis Police Captain. She loves salted caramel lava cake, dark chocolate, and caramel Frappuccinos.

Visit her:

Website: lorettaeidson.com

Facebok: loretta.eidson.7 

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Talking Character

Keeping a Character File

Do you have a method for capturing the bits and pieces you use to create memorable, complex characters? If not, consider starting a character file.

What does a character file look like? It’s up to you. You could use a hardbound journal, a file folder filled with clippings and sticky notes, or a program like Evernote. Collect and organize the data any way you like, but if you don’t keep a character file in some form or other, I suggest you start.

Three types of character files a writer might find useful

A people-watching file

Whether you are sitting on a bench watching people go by, or hanging out with friends at a party, a writer should always be on the lookout for character inspiration.  Keep a record of interesting details such as:

  • Quirks
  • Mannerisms
  • Striking physical features
  • Attire, hairstyles, jewelry, and tattoos
  • How people express emotions, especially non-verbally
  • How people behave in a given situation—particularly tense or unexpected ones.
  • How different personalities interact. For example, who is in the middle of things and who has gravitated to the fringes.

A literary file

Books are filled with character descriptions. While it’s not appropriate to plagiarize another writer’s words, it pays to record striking details, descriptions and observations. They might give you insights into technique or become a model for your own creative ideas. You should consider collecting snippets like:

  • Vivid physical descriptions
  • Clever metaphors used to describe characters
  • Insights into a character’s behavior or inner turmoil
  • Descriptions of highly eccentric characters that work
  • Quirks or mannerisms that you find charming, or that help you identify with a character
  • Dialogue or internal monologue that vividly conveys attitude or personality

You might also want to note what doesn’t work, particularly if you can pinpoint why.

  • Characters you find annoying
  • Descriptions that fell flat or felt wrong
  • Characters whose physical descriptions don’t seem to fit their personality

A character-specific file

As you build characters for your stories, you may find it helpful to collect various tidbits that apply to a particular character. Many writers find Pinterest to be a great tool for this, and once the book is published they share the board with their readers. In addition to collecting snippets of character description like those mentioned above, a character-specific file might include:

  • Photos that look like your character, or that vividly express emotions or attitudes your character often exhibits
  • Photos or descriptions of clothing, jewelry and hairstyles.
  • Props your character might use: tools, cookware, swords, chariots, whatever.
  • Details of décor, furniture, gardens, and architecture that might fill the character’s home.

These are only a few suggestions of what can be included in a character file. Trust your creative intuition and include anything that strikes you, no matter how irrelevant it seems at the time. Who knows what brilliant ideas a random detail may spark—if you take the time to capture it.

 

Lisa E. Betz believes that everyone has a story to tell the world. She loves to encourage fellow writers to be intentional about their craft and courageous in sharing their words with others. Lisa shares her words through dramas, Bible studies, historical mysteries, and her blog about intentional living. You can find her on Facebook  LisaEBetzWriter and Twitter @LisaEBetz

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Talking Character

Use Setting to Define Character

You can learn a lot about a person by visiting their house or office. A writer can use that to her advantage.

Let’s assume your POV character is visiting the office of Mr. Smith, who they are meeting for the first time. You could simply describe the office as tidy or messy and give a hint of Mr. Smith’s character, or you could create a setting that painted a vivid picture of the occupant.

Four office setting examples that paint a picture of their occupants:

Office # 1

Mr. Smith’s office was extremely tidy. Two walls were taken up by bookcases, organized by subject. A third wall was filled by a row of identical filing cabinets, each drawer marked with a color-coded label. The stack of in-boxes was labeled with similar color-coded cards, and the squares on the desk-sized calendar were divided into numbered slices using colored ink. Next to the calendar lay a blank legal pad and a row of colored pens, each aligned perfectly with the edge of the desk.

Office # 2

Mr. Smith’s office was extremely tidy. Two walls were taken up by bookcases, filled with row after row of old books in matching bindings. A white mini blind covered the window, which was flanked by identical gray filing cabinets. A gray desk filled the center of the room, bare except for a pad of white paper, a single black pen and an empty in-box. Behind the desk, in place of the typical swivel desk chair stood a metal folding chair. The unpadded kind.

Two tidy offices. Two very different occupants. The same goes for these two messy offices…

Office # 3

Mr. Smith’s office was a chaotic wreck. Two walls were taken up by bookcases crammed with books, many of which had bits of paper marking various pages. More books were lying open on the desk amidst a jumble of papers. Behind the desk was a white board covered in rectangles filled with compact writing. The blocks of text were connected by arrows and peppered with sticky notes and occasional doodles. A stack of papers at least a foot high filled the in-box, occasional colored sticky notes jutting from the stack.

Office # 4

Mr. Smith’s office was a chaotic wreck. Two walls were taken up by bookcases filled with books, lumps of rock, lab equipment, and a variety of hats. Larger pieces of lab equipment sat on the floor behind the desk, under a pile of lab aprons. A flashlight and a single work boot balanced atop the pile. The desk was covered in a jumble of dented three-ring binders, crumpled napkins, empty coffee mugs, a handful of mechanical pencils, and a large box of jumbo-sized paperclips that had tipped over and spilled its contents across the mess and onto the floor.

As these examples show, before Mr. Smith enters the scene, we have a pretty good idea of his personality based solely on the description of his office.

One descriptive paragraph performing double duty—setting the scene and introducing a character at the same time.

Four suggestions for using setting to enhance your characters:

  • Create a personal space. Does your character have a space he has some control over, such as an office or bedroom. As in the examples above, those spaces can be filled with possessions and decor that communicate his personality.
  • Introduce a passion. What kinds of setting best define your character’s passions? A sewing room? The garage? An empty-lot-turned-garden? The local fitness club? A mountain path? Can you find a way to introduce the character in that space?
  • Define a sanctuary. What kinds of setting does your character go to when they desire peace and quiet, or when they need comfort or safety? A tree house in the backyard? A friend’s apartment? The local library? The attic? Show the details that make the space a sanctuary for your character.
  • Use character to fine-tune the setting. List words that describe your character. Does the list bring a specific setting to mind? Use it. Does the list include words like messy, colorful, or stylish that could be applied to a multitude of settings? Let those words inform the setting details.

Make your setting do double duty by painting a vivid picture of the characters who belong there.

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Dear Young Scribes

Balancing the Elements of Fiction – Part 1

Have you ever noticed how some authors tend to focus too much on writing certain fiction elements, yet ignore the others? Maybe their writing sounds a little like this…

Dialogue
Action beat
Dialogue
Action beat
Dialogue
Action beat

And on and on. Or perhaps the author writes far too much description and internal monologue and not enough dialogue or action. This becomes easily distracting, don’t you think? This is why we need to be careful that we aren’t making the same mistake in our own writing.

The elements of fiction include the following: description, dialogue, exposition, action beats, & interior monologue. Fiction writers should study and master each of these elements separately if they wish to deliver a story in novel format. However, the placement of these elements is vital. The elements need to be braided together throughout each scene and flow naturally so the scene becomes 4D to the reader. It’s a writer’s job to understand how to balance these elements in a way that keeps the pace of the story moving along.

Let’s think about this in movie format. Pretend as though you’re watching a film. If the camera focused on the scenery of the setting rather than the dialogue, I doubt you’d be intrigued enough to continue watching the movie. On the other hand, if the scenes focused on back-and-forth dialogue, don’t you think that’d feel restricting? Each element of the story must work together in order to portray the full spectrum.

If we can establish this in our fiction novels, then we will master the art of crafting a story that immerses our readers and brings them into a “fictive dream”. They’ll feel almost as though the story is happening to themselves rather than to the characters.

This is a balancing act, one that every fiction writer must strive to achieve in their stories. If we give too much emphasis on exposition and description, then dialogue, interior monologue, and beats will be neglected. So how can we balance the elements of fiction?

First, we must understand the definition and role of each element. We’ll discuss this in the next post of this series.

Which of these elements do you tend to give too much attention to in your own writing?

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Talking Character

5 Character Development Exercises

Go shopping

This non-writing exercise can help you connect with your character in a tangible way, by interacting with real objects:

What kind of store does your character like to shop at? A home improvement store, hobby shop, department store, consignment shop? Go to one near you and walk the aisles, searching for at least five items your character would buy.

Now head to the grocery store and go through the aisles looking for foods your characters would normally eat. If your courage and budget allow, buy some food and create your character’s favorite dinner.

Describe their personal space

Write a few paragraphs describing your character’s bedroom, study, or some other special place. Include as much detail as possible, including small, ordinary things such as cracked plaster, the creak of the window being opened, and two-week-old crumpled socks. Now read back over the description and circle the details that best relay the character’s personality. Read through it again and refine several details, making them as specific and telling as possible.

Describe someone else’s space

Place your POV character in a setting that belongs to a character they are in conflict with, such as the office of a rival or the house of an estranged parent. Describe the setting through the POV character’s eyes. What details do they notice? What might they not notice, or not care about? What judgments (right or wrong) do they make from visiting the space?

Now bring a different character into the same space and repeat the exercise. Compare the descriptions. Could a reader easily tell which description came from which character?

Craft a bio

If your character works in a professional setting, create a resume, complete with future career goals. If a job setting doesn’t apply, give the character a reason to describe themselves to a stranger and write a one-page bio monologue.

Now write an interior monologue describing what the character really thinks about themselves. How different is it from their public persona? Why?

Immerse yourself in a favorite pastime

All people, real or fictional, do something with their spare time. Real people may waste it binge-watching Netflix, but hopefully your character has a specific hobby or two that helps define their character. Get to know your character better by immersing yourself in one of those activities:

Spend an hour or two listening to their favorite music then do some reading about a few of the important musicians in that genre. Read a few of their favorite books. Find someone who knows about beekeeping or radio-controlled airplanes and spend an afternoon watching them.

For the truly devoted: Is your character into pottery, oil painting, or tai chi? Take a class in that subject. (And remember, the point is to experience it, so it doesn’t matter how embarrassing your skills might be. Pretend you are as good as the instructor and soak it in.)

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