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A Lighter Look at the Writer's Life

Happy Days Are Here Again

A few years ago, I got to the point where I could not watch the evening news. It was just TOO MUCH, causing me to be depressed. One evening, around news time, I surfed the channels and found an oasis—one of the oldies channels showing an hour of Happy Days during my normal news time. Finally, a solution to the doom and gloom!

If you’ve been under a rock for half a century or are too young to remember, Happy Days follows the exploits of Richie Cunningham (played by Ron Howard, Opie grown up a bit) and Arthur “The Fonz” Fonzarelli (Henry Winkler) and the rest of their gang, navigating life in the late ‘50s/early ‘60s. The show debuted in 1974 during a wave of ‘50s nostalgia and lasted until 1984—my formative years.

One night during my “anti-news Happy Days mini-marathon,” I witnessed a big juxtaposition I had forgotten. The first episode of the evening was the second season finale, focusing on Richie and his pals Potsie and Ralph Malph on an overnight school field trip to Chicago. Typical of the first two seasons, the episode was on film, enhanced with a laugh track, and played out like a mini-movie.

The next episode that night was the season three premiere, and the changes were startling. Facing sagging ratings, the producers revamped the series that season, shooting on videotape in front of a live audience and placing the Fonz, previously a minor character, at the center of the action, with more broad comedy and catchphrases like “Sit on it!” The changes worked ratings-wise, as Happy Days soon became the number-one show on television and remained near the top for several seasons, even after Ron Howard left to become a famous film director.

I was in middle school when this change to “Fonzie and More Fonzie” took place. He was the coolest character on the planet, and my classmates and I wanted to be like him. I even had a “I’m with the Fonz” t-shirt with a depiction of his “thumbs-up” pose.

Seeing the stark differences in tone from one episode to the next made me think of such changes in writing direction. When I began writing and pursuing publication, I was firmly in the fiction camp, planning to be the next Great American Novelist. I attended writers conferences and studied dialogue, POV, and all things fiction.

Just as Richie and Fonz and crew changed tone, God changed my direction a few years into my journey, guiding me toward writing devotions and other inspirational essays. Back in the day, I remember the new Happy Days took some getting used to, and my new “Carlton devotions” felt the same. I did learn that some of the things I studied in fiction writing—the aforementioned dialogue and POV, among other techniques—have made me a better writer of inspirational essays. Setting a scene for your readers is just as important in nonfiction as it is in fiction.

What to do if God changes your writing direction? Be like the Fonz: give a thumbs up and say “AAAAYYYYY!!!!” Then Sit on It and start writing.

Carlton Hughes, represented by Cyle Young of Hartline Literary, wears many hats. By day, he is a professor of communication. On Wednesday evenings and Sunday mornings, he serves as a children’s pastor. In his “spare time,” he is a freelance writer. Carlton is an empty-nesting dad and devoted husband who likes long walks on the beach, old sitcoms, and chocolate—all the chocolate. His work has been featured in Chicken Soup for the Soul: The Dating Game, The Wonders of Nature, Let the Earth Rejoice, Just Breathe, So God Made a Dog, and Everyday Grace for Men. His latest book is Adventures in Fatherhood, co-authored with Holland Webb.

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Rich and Concise: How to Tell More without Extra Words

Using fewer words to convey clear ideas will always engage readers. Concise writing grabs the reader’s attention because it does not use any extra verbs, nouns, and nominalizations. 

A writer’s work becomes more effective by avoiding redundant phrases and conveying the idea quickly. Improve concise writing by engaging in writing exercises, reading other exemplary works, and consciously avoiding the temptation to use long sentences. Here are a few ideas to make every writing piece rich and attractive and creating lasting memories for the readers. Your New Year writing goals might become a reality with this helpful guide.

Improve Vocabulary to Avoid Nominalizations

Read the works of other authors, dictionaries and use various online resources to improve your vocabulary. Using apt words instead of extraneous sentences will make the writing look rich, exquisite, and easy to understand. Writing “he assessed the software,” instead of “he decided to do a thorough check on the pros and cons of the software,” will interest the readers better.

Always aim to keep the sentences under 30 words and paragraphs under 300 words maximum. Convey one single idea by starting with logic or statement, explain the reason or cause that adds to the argument and highlight what you wish to convey precisely. 

This software helps in improving all your performance challenges related to managing a strict deadline and increasing productivity by helping you keep track of your daily progress through automatic backup.

The software makes automatic backups of daily progress to increase productivity and manage deadlines better.

Logic – The software takes automatic backup.

Cause – of daily progress to increase productivity.

Highlighting point – manage deadlines better.

Both sentences convey the same message. But, the second one is easy to read and remember. 

Cultivating Brevity in Daily Writing

Avoiding filler words and correct noun usage is essential to master concise writing as they are tricky to use. Avoid using the common filler words like “that,” “of,” or “up” as they make the sentence unnecessarily long. E.g., I climbed the stairs/ I climbed up the stairs. Do not start a sentence with “this,” “there is,” “there are,” and “it.” 

Always start a sentence with subject, and use a noun along with these four words – this, that, these, and those. For example – avoid “this is unbearable” and try “The pain is unbearable.” Avoid writing “I like these” and write, “I love these colors.” Try to avoid extra nouns like, “these are the basic and necessary steps you must do,” and write “do these important steps.”

Avoiding these common mistakes will make the writing look much more professional and exciting to read. Following this set of collective rules is termed brevity, meaning short and to the point. Incorporate brevity in the emails or resumes, business writing, letters, and all other daily writing forms to save time and convey strong and short messages effectively.

Proper Adjective and Minimal Adverb Usage  

Improve the vocabulary by expanding your knowledge of various common but less used adjectives. There are plenty of ways to shorten a sentence using the right adjectives. Some common examples are very good – superb, really boring – tedious, too harsh – severe.

Correct use of adjectives is vital to set the mood of the sentence and create an emotional appeal. Most of the “Show don’t tell” writing principles stress using proper adjectives to convey emotions. Adjectives are the key to good writing, and mastering the correct usage of adjectives through training and expanding knowledge will improve the quality of writing extensively. 

Try to avoid adverbs usage unless necessary, as most editors try to filter out nearly all the adverbs unless it is indispensable to use them. The thumb rule is to use the adverbs only to mention color, size, or quantity. Most beginner writers tend to use adverbs with “ly” extensively. Instead of writing “quickly,” try to write “quick to.” 

Effective Active Voice Usage

Minimizing the usage of adverbs will also lead to writing efficiently in the active voice. Passive voice writing is often not preferred in business communications and official reports. The modern writing comprising blogs and social media also does not encourage using passive voice sentences. 

Writing in active voice and using passive voice only in unavoidable circumstances is an efficient way to showcase excellent writing skills. Replace adverb usage with exciting descriptions that paint a picture of the situation or background. Classic novels do a great job of describing the situation without excessive adverb usage.

Read them regularly and try recreating the everyday modern conditions in a similar style to improve concise writing. Read contemporary science fiction to learn about brief descriptions.

Try Various Writing Exercises 

Writing, as is with painting, is a skill that will improve only with constant practice. Try various writing exercises incorporating the points mentioned above. Start by creating an exciting tweet about this article in 140 characters using just 22 words.  

Read the work of prominent authors like Kurt Vonnegut, who is well-known for concise writing. Start writing their work in your own words for two minutes, setting up a timer, and write in your style.

Once the time is over, compare your writing with the original piece and spot the differences in the wording. Now count the words in your essay, shorten them in half, compare your shortened work with the original part, and note the improvement. 

Select a caption or appealing newspaper heading and paraphrase it within 20 words without using any filler words. Try the numerous other writing exercises available online and judge where you stand in using articulate words as a writer.

Conclusion

Write for your audience and with a will to provide something valuable and easy for them to understand. Do not overstuff words. Try to edit and re-edit several times before you are certain that every message is concise. Building a loyal readership is all about providing variety and trying not to be monotonous. Avoid making your sentences long and complicated. Organize your ideas, streamline the writing structure and convey the message confidently without any extra frills to bait the audience.  

Leon Collier is a UK-based academic writer and editor working among the best professional paper writers. His current job is with https://my-assignment.help/nursing-assignment-help/ where he helps medical students write research papers, essays and lab reports. When not busy writing, you can find him reading books and novels or playing tabletop games with his buddies. Follow him on Twitter @LeonCollier12.

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Mastering Middle Grade

Real talk: When to submit your manuscript

Writing a book is the literary exercise equivalent of taking a cross-country road trip. No matter how beautiful the scenery, after a few miles even the most energetic drivers grow road-weary, and the “are we there yet” questions start flying from the back seat.

That’s when we start thinking about shortcuts. How much easier would it be to go ahead and take the tollway instead of the scenic route?

Of course what I’m referring to here is knowing when it’s time to stop editing and send your manuscript to an agent or editor. How do we know we’re ready? That’s a question I’ve both asked and heard at conferences or workshops.

The answers I’ve heard have varied, but I’ve collected the responses that resonated the most with me and put together a little checklist. This is what I’m using to determine whether my most recent works-in-progress are ready to go. 

Have you read your work out loud?

One agent suggested that unless you’ve listened to your own work out loud – whether you read and record then play it back, or have a trusted friend read it to you – your work may not be polished enough to send. 

Imagine you’re reading your middle grade novel to a classroom full of fourth or fifth graders and really listen as you read. Is the dialogue easy to follow? Do the jokes make sense? Are there scenes that lack tension or is the pace awkward? When you hear it, you can fix it.  

What does my critique group think?

There’s truly no substitute or shortcut for good writing. If you don’t have a trusted critique group or reading partner, you need to find one or create one. The best groups will read thoughtfully and give sincere feedback on what’s working and what’s not. If your critique group thinks it’s ready, that’s a good sign.

Is this your fifth (at least) draft?

I’ve heard a number of authors say that their agent never sees the first five drafts of any project. Sometimes they don’t even submit draft number six. They revise, polish, pause, revise again… you get the picture.

It’s hard, but you must resist the temptation to submit your second or even your third draft. Make sure you’re putting your shiniest, best work in a prospective agent’s or editor’s hands.

If you’ve done all three of these things – read it out loud, received the “go ahead” from your critique group, and you’ve revised the whole thing a few times, good news! You are probably ready to submit. Now you’ll want to research agencies and editors to check their submission guidelines, but that’s a post for another day.

I am still on this road trip to being published, and these are the biggest, most painful things I’ve learned along the way.  Please know I’m writing this not to discourage anyone from submitting. Far from it. I am cheering for you and I want you to succeed.

I’m writing this because I have made the mistake of submitting manuscripts too soon simply because I was excited about a story.

 I mean, I loved my story, my husband and son loved it, so why didn’t the rest of the world? I’ll tell you why. My husband and son read past the unpolished words and saw what was in my heart. They love me.

Loving me is not an editor or agent’s job. Their job is to fall in love with what’s actually written on the page. My job – your job – as a middle grade author is to make sure the words on the page are worth falling in love with.

Kell McKinney earned a B.A. in journalism from the University of Oklahoma and an M.S. in documentary studies from the University of North Texas. She’s a part-time copywriter, double-time mom and wife, and spends every free minute writing and/or hunting for her car keys. Connect with her on Twitter @Kell_McK or kellmckinney.com.

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Don’t Do Dat – or That

Today’s tip on Polishing Your Message is . . . Don’t Do That.

Do What?

Overuse the word that.

The overuse of  that is one of my pet peeves when grading college essays. (Did you hear me students?) And as expected, many editors feel the same way. So don’t be surprised when you read this in more than one place. Fellow A3 writer Lori Hatcher also shares the same advice in a recent blog about “How To Drive Editors Crazy – Part 2.”

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Overuse of the word has become acclimated in our speech; thus, we easily overlook it when we write it. Most of the time that used in an essay, article, or blog can easily be removed without harm to the sentence or the message.  Simply read the sentence without it and see if it changes the meaning. If not, omit it. When used incorrectly, the word that is as useful as those empty modifiers we also try to avoid like very, really, totally, truly, etc.

Now I am not saying to remove the word that every time. Many sentences will need the word to show the reader important information will soon follow. Most of the time our ear will tell us if that is needed or not. The goal for this post is to suggest you be more aware when polishing your drafts and looking for unnecessary words which can be omitted.

If you would like to read a more thorough source on when to leave that in and when to leave that out, I’ll share with you Grammar Girl’s discussion for your reading pleasure. She has much more to say on the topic. You will be amazed how much there is to think about when considering that little four letter word.

So ,add that to your proofreading checklist, and have fun polishing your message.

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A Shell of a Draft . . .

Shortly after moving to the Islands, a new habit easily became walking early on the beach. On one particular morning, something unlikely happened. (Unlikely from my beach experiences . . . ) I found a big beautiful shell— a whole shell. Do you understand?  I found a large complete shell five inches tall and four inches wide.  Feeling stunned, amazed, and thrilled, I instantly knew I was meant to find this particular shell, on this particular day, in this particular way.

How do I know that? Because it was God showing off again in my world. See, before my walk I had just read how God uses our SHAPE for his purpose. SHAPE being an acronym from Rick Warren’s book A Purpose Driven Life (236).  His SHAPE acronym represents the following words and how God uses them in our life:

S – Spiritual Gifts

H – Heart

A – Abilities

P – Personality

E – Experiences

The SHELL I found is a symbol for the devotion I had read and a gift to remember the lesson. Believe me, I have walked beaches many times, and I have never found such a big unbroken SHELL. On this particular day, He reminded me he has made us all for a special purpose and wants us to use all the above traits for his purpose.

A couple months pass and again I’m walking the beach contemplating inspirations for a new blog, and again I am still thinking about that SHELL. (Now anytime I see a shell, I think of that shell.)

As I continue walking the pastel carpet of broken shell pieces listening to the crunch of each step, I ponder Warren’s acronym and think about how our first drafts for short blogs, essays, and articles form a shell for our final written work. Getting that first Shell of a Draft is sometimes the hardest part of writing. Coming up with ideas is not difficult for writers– it is giving the idea shape. Ask around and discover, most writers keep stashes of ideas tucked in shoe boxes, notebooks, electronic files, and the sandy corners of their minds to develop one day. Discerning what direction, what purpose, and for what audience an idea best agrees often forms its shape when we write that First Shell of a Draft.

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While walking and enjoying the formation of birds standing at attention, a new ACRONYM for the word SHAPE came to mind. An acronym to help writers create a first SHELL OF A DRAFT.

How to SHAPE a Shell of a Draft:

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S – See it

H – Hear it

A – Ask it

P – Perceive it

E – End it, Edit it, Edit it, Edit it,  .  .  .  and END IT.

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See it:

One of my favorite quotes to share is by E.M Forster, “How do I know what I think until I see what I say?” The heart of our drafts often originates when we free write those first initial thoughts and ideas. Sometimes we are surprised by what appears on the blank screen or notebook and we discover, learn, and grow when what is deep within our heart is revealed.  So for step one, when you have a topic or idea,  just write. Write to see what’s on your mind. Write to see what’s on your heart, and write to see what’s in your Spirit. Just get it down on paper.

Hear it:

Do my thoughts flow smoothly for the reader? Reread the draft repeatedly listening for areas where words may be missing or thoughts are not connecting smoothly. (Perhaps some transitions will help.) Listen for opportunities of adding parallelism with list or alliteration to catch a reader’s attention. These are all writing elements, tools, or techniques a wordsmith enjoys adding to his or her work. Pay attention to word choice when rereading aloud. Look up words if needed and use a thesaurus to reduce redundancy. Finally, say a little prayer and trust your ear; trust it as an assistant to your writing.

Ask it:

Are there any areas of confusion? Are the examples and support all supporting the main idea of the message? If not, some may need to be omitted. Writers often have lots of ideas on how to reveal a message, but determine which details and examples best reveal your purpose and audience and omit the rest. This question is a key factor in helping writers decide what to leave in and what to take out. If it does not support the purpose, consider leaving it out.

Perceive it:

This is the time for peer review or reader feedback. Can the text be misunderstood, unclear, or offensive to readers? How might others interpret the prose? When asking someone’s perspective, you may want to share a past blog on how a friend can offer confident feedback.

End it: 

This may be the hardest decision, but deadlines and goals help encourage the process. End it, then edit it, end it again, let it rest, and edit it again. Embrace the process and accept revision, revision, revision is required to get that draft into shape. Continue the process until you feel peace or your time has expired. Say a little prayer and let your message go.

Today, when I hold the shell I found, it symbolizes for me the SHAPE God is molding me into and how my spirit, heart, abilities, personality, and experiences SHAPE my writing. In addition, the shell is a marker of answered prayer (for years I’ve wanted to live back near a beach).  It represents my current life transition from single motherhood to empty-nester and the SHAPE for which my heavenly father sees me and cares about every detail in my life– even a walk on the beach.

I hope these suggestions will help new writers develop their ideas into drafts and then on to a final message.

(I am ending here because it’s now time to go walk on the beach with a friend.)

Below, I invite you to share what gifts God reveals to  you while enjoying nature.

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Polishing Your Message

Building Bridges With Transitions

Transitions are an important element in our writing. Without them a paragraph can sometimes feel like we are reading a grocery list. The sentences seem choppy feeling like we are jumping from one thought to another.

I like to tell my students to think of transitions as bridges. They help connect the writer’s thoughts and allow the reader to easily follow and comprehend the message. Without them, the reader may have to work harder to concentrate and associate the unwritten connections. (Do remember, as writers, it is our job to make reading easy for our audience.) In addition, transitions will polish our writing and help us not lose our readers as we deliver our message.

As mentioned, I think of transitional devices as bridges, which brings to mind many different types of bridges: short bridges, long bridges, covered bridges, weak bridges,  and sturdy steel bridges. Without them, we cannot get to the other side, which is often where we are trying to take our readers. Equally, many different types of transitions are available as tools to help move our thoughts along. These transitions can be short using one word, long using phrases, weak by choosing wrong words, and sturdy dependable transitions like the list below.   These bridges can transport readers past years in time with a few little words. For example: “Six years later. . . .” Or maybe we skip to the next thought using words like ” first, next,” and “finally.” Choosing the best transitional device takes practice and a good ear, so be sure to read the text aloud and listen to hear if it connects your thoughts smoothly.

The different transitional devices and phrases will lead the reader in a variety of directions.   See below a list of common transitions and their purposes.  Many list are available online (see above link) and handy tools to have available.   

  • Addition or Sequences – also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, in addition
  • Comparison – also, similarly, in the same way, likewise
  • Contrast – even so, however, in contrast, still, otherwise, nevertheless
  • Examples – for example, for instance, that is
  • Emphasis – Indeed, in fact, of course
  • Place – below, elsewhere, nearby, to the east
  • Repetition or Summary – in brief, in other words, in short, in summary
  • Cause and Effect – as a result, consequently, hence, therefore, thus
  • Time Sequence- Eventually, finally, meanwhile, next, once, then, today, now

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In a similar manner, life also offers us many transitions. I recently experienced a major life transition (which is why my posts are void a couple expected blogs). On July 15, 2015, I had no idea what my immediate or long term future held. I didn’t know my future job or expected resources. My youngest was leaving the nest and starting college. Thus, I was unsure of my future purpose and direction. Nevertheless, by August 15, 2015, God had moved me to Savannah, moved me from a three bedroom home with a garage to a one bedroom condo, moved me into a new job, and made me an official Empty Nester all in one week. How is that for godly transitions? He built a bridge in 30 days which was easy to follow and easy to comprehend knowing His hand was in every aspect of my life transition.

As a result, I think God often likes to show off in how he makes a transition come about. During that month, He sure showed off to me. He had me laughing, praising, and full of joy as he provided  encouraging Christian shoppers at three yard sales to downsize. The sales alone were fun, joyful, and full of good wishes and prayers for my future from strangers. Next, He led me to the perfect condo close to the beach, and He provided kind people to help me move. (Living near the beach has been a desire for many years, but I expected it would not be reality until much later in life . . . Thank you Lord!) He opened a door to teach in a Christian environment, and as always, He provided the resources needed perfectly. This bridge to my next season in life was joyful, easy to cross, and covered with his protection all the way.

Meanwhile, my long term future is still unknown now living as an Empty  Nester  enjoying Fridays spent reading, writing, and biking.  As an adjunct instructor, for me my semesters are also my bridges. I know not where the end of this one will lead, and I do not worry. He has provided all I need for this semester. So although I am single, I am not alone. Today, January 15, 2016, I am here Lord, ready to cross the next bridge with you.

PS. When I wrote my bio 6 months ago, I never dreamed I would be living near the beach within 30 days. God is good. (Imagine big smile here.)

So, what life transitions has God used to show off in your world lately?

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Sources: Quick Access: Reference for Writers 7th ed.  Lynn Q Troyka and Douglas Hessee (65)

 

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Polishing Your Message

Three Steps to Confident Feedback

Ever ask a friend’s, relative’s or colleague’s opinion on something you’ve written? You wait patiently, trying not to stare, interpreting each facial expression as a sign or clue. Finally a reply, “I like it,” or “It’s good,” is uttered with no additional words following.  You think to yourself, That’s it? That doesn’t help me.

Perhaps on occasion you have been the person responding above not knowing what to say.  You didn’t feel confident offering your thoughts. You’re not an expert or a published author. You still have trouble calling yourself a writer.

Well, “It’s good,” doesn’t say anything.  To a writer the phrase is too vague, too meaningless. He or she is seeking feedback more specific.

Whether asking for feedback or offering feedback, here are three steps to help readers share responses to a draft.

Before you start to read, let go of the pressure to catch every error or mistake. There is a difference between editing/proofreading and reader responses. Don’t be afraid. You are qualified to respond. You are an experienced reader, and writers need to know how their message is being received or interpreted. You are qualified to offer your reaction and thoughts to something you read.

Next, keep it simple. Keep it nice, and remember three things by ReadWriteThink.org:

PQP: Praise-Question-Polish.

Step 1: PRAISE.   Always find something positive to say about the piece you have been asked to read. Perhaps you like a particular phrase or word choice that lingers in your mind after reading, or you like how the writer describes a scene which easily forms in your mind’s eye. Always find something big or small to praise within the work.

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Step 2: QUESTION.  As you read make notes of any questions that enter your mind. Maybe you wonder why the author doesn’t mention something you would expect to be included on the topic, or where the baby was in the scene when the mother went to the store. Any questions while reading can offer insight the author may need to improve or revise the current draft or work.

Step 3: POLISH.   Finally, offer specific ways you think the writer could polish the piece. These comments cannot be too vague. When you offer an idea to polish, the writer cannot be wondering what you mean. He or she needs a starting point or direction to act on your comment. Read-Write-Think suggests three types of comments: vague, general/useful, and specific. Below are examples of each:

Vague:  “Revise the second paragraph.” or “It’s good.”

Useful/general: “shiny engiveI don’t see enough background information or support for your idea.” or “Can you describe the kitchen scene better?”

Specific:  “I like how you give the points to remember, but can you add an example to help readers better understand what you mean?” or “The title doesn’t seem to convey the topic.”

If grammar and mechanics are your strengths, by all means offer comments and corrections. If you think something doesn’t look right, but you are not sure, you may suggest the writer double check a concern. The main thing about “Polish” is to give the writer a starting point or direction to consider changes.

Writers know what they intend to say in the message, but the receiver of the message does not always hear it as intended. If you are asked to offer quick feedback on a draft, just remember PQP. You can always find something positive to say, did you have any questions, and offer a specific comment the writer may consider to polish the piece.

You don’t have to be an expert or published author to provide helpful feedback to a writer. And as a writer, what you do with the feedback is entirely up to you. Some suggestions will spur new ideas, and some will lead to a dead end and remain left behind.  Nonetheless, diverse readers, diverse backgrounds, and diverse worldviews will encourage your message to be received differently. Stay focused on your message and meaning, use feedback to clarify and polish, then send your message out trusting the Holy Spirit to handle the rest.

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Source acknowledged:  www.readwritethink.org,

ReadWriteThink.org is a nonprofit website maintained by the International Literacy Association and the National Council of Teachers of English, with support from the Verizon Foundation.”

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“Hi Their” – First Impressions

“Hi Their [sic]” were the two words I read. “Bye There!” was the instant reply in my head.

Really? Someone sent “Hi Their [sic]” popping onto my screen?

Only two words had travelled from his electronic dating profile to mine.  It took one second for them to occupy their chat box space, and it took two seconds for me to decide his fate.