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Moving From Dream to Deal

“I have never worked a day in my life without selling. If I believe in something, I sell it, and I sell it hard.”  

Estée Lauder

“People don’t ask for facts in making up their minds. They would rather have one good, soul-satisfying emotion than a dozen facts.”

            Robert Keith Leavit, author and historian

Preparing an overview has proven time and time again to be a challenge that stumps even the most experienced of writers. How do you take this massive idea for a story and condense it down to a page?

Somewhere out there is an author for whom writing a commercial overview is a piece of cake. They sit down, the concept is hovering in the air over their computer, they type it out, done and dusted. I haven’t met them, but I’m sure they exist. If you happen to be that lone individual, I’d advise you not to tell other authors. Your end will be swift and certain.

For the rest of us, the story overview is a beast.

You have all these ideas that are swarming around in your head. You have a huge cast of characters, a growing storm of events, and three or four hundred pages later, you’ve created a fabulous tale.

How on earth do you distill all this down to one page? How can you tell your story in just a few paragraphs, create in that tiny space a vision that is so compelling the gatekeepers will fall over themselves in their haste to offer you a publishing contract, a film deal, the keys to the kingdom, whatever?

After twenty-five years as a published author, the simple answer is, it doesn’t come easy.  

For my latest story, I worked on the overview for seven weeks. 

All through the initial phase of shaping the characters and the story, I returned over and over to this daunting task.  I knew I had something great here.  The challenge was, creating an overview that made other people feel the same way.

I am going to offer you a few simple steps that will help deconstruct the project, and hopefully guide you towards a synopsis that is magnetic in its appeal.

Do This Now:

  • Start with the question, so what’s your story about? Imagine you are seated in a television studio.  The cameras swish around on silent rubber wheels.  The lights are intense and aimed at you.  The much-loved interviewer shows you that world-famous smile, and then asks you that question.  What is your story about?

How do you respond? You have the live audience on the other side of the camera,  and they’re genuinely eager for you to tell them what they’re going to go out and buy the very next day.      

Write out what you would say.  Limit yourself to just one paragraph.      

Then set it aside.

  • Accept that it is a gradual process. Don’t make the mistake of thinking that this first effort is going to be your finished project. Creating the winning overview is done through trial and error. A few days later, write your first paragraph again.

Keep a notebook just for the overview. If you’re like me, most of these early attempts are not going to fit. But gradually you come to terms with the key element to the successful overview, which is:

  • Your job is not to tell your story. Your goal is to SELL your story. At some point there will come that moment when you discover the amazing concept, the emotional foundation that fuels your quest to write this story. When that happens…
  • Focus on that silver thread. Usually this emotional punch will help you identify the key plot line and characters that drive the story. The entire overview must center upon this one element. This time, when you write the paragraph, you will discover that the entire concept is real in a new sense. The paragraph that results is often called the story’s hook.
  • Begin with the hook, end with the climax. Gradually you develop a story concept that was not there before. As a result, you will often perceive your story’sclimax in a new light. Write this final paragraph next. Remember, you are not entering into a contract. You are not required to actually keep this climax. You are selling.
  • Develop a log-line. The log-line is a Hollywood term, signifying the one sentence or even just a phrase that shouts to the world: This is unique, this is great, come join me on this amazing ride. At some point during the writing of my overview, I will go to the movies and walk down the line of posters for coming attractions. I visualize my story up there as a poster, and sketch out ideas for what this log-line might be. My goal is to come up with two, and I place one at the beginning and another at the end of my overview. These help the editor sell the story to the pub board, and the sales staff place your book with buyers. Oftentimes they also appear on the book’s back cover.
  • Polish and distill. Only at this point do I begin to concern myself with length. Because I want my overview to work with Hollywood, I must limit myself to one page. It is very rare for anything longer to be considered by senior executives. If an overview gets that far up the food chain, a junior exec will trim the longer structures. I much prefer to do that myself.

A final bit of advice: Refrain from speaking with anyone about your work until your overview is complete.

This serves two purposes. First, you have created a commercial structure, and that is what outside readers are really all about. They respond to your project, not to the tender seed of creative fire that exists at heart level.

Second, you now have a means by which you can present your story in a brief and concise fashion. When someone asks what the story is about, you actually know what to say.

I wish you every triumph in making a winning transition from creative project to commercial success.

Davis Bunn’s novels have sold in excess of eight million copies in twenty-four languages.  He has appeared on numerous national bestseller lists, and his titles have been Main or Featured Selections with every major US book club.  In 2011 his novel Lion of Babylon was named Best Book of the Year by Library Journal.  The sequel, entitled Rare Earth,  won Davis his fourth Christy Award for Excellence in Fiction in 2013.  In 2014 Davis was granted the Lifetime Achievement award by the Christy board of judges.  His recent title Trial Run has been named Best Book of The Year by Suspense Magazine. Lately he has appeared on the cover of Southern Writers Magazine and Publishers Weekly, and in the past three years his titles have earned him Best Book and Top Pick awards from Library Journal, Romantic Times, Publishers Weekly, Booklist, and Kirkus. His most recent series, Miramar Bay, have been acquired for world-wide condensation-books by Readers Digest. Currently Davis serves as Writer-In-Residence at Regent’s Park College, Oxford University. Until Covid struck, he was speaking around the world on aspects of creative writing. 

Watch an excerpt from his new book The Cottage on Lighthouse Lane here.

Learn about his new home at Blenheim Castle here.

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Writing for YA

Writing a First (or Second) Novel: Story Premise & GMC

I love new, fresh story ideas.

When I first started writing stories, I would attempt to capture a thought or feeling the minute it sprang to mind. I didn’t plan my stories. Needless to say, many of these vignettes meandered or ended up unfinished.

What was I missing? Story premise.

This isn’t an article about plotting versus pantsing. This is about generating a viable story idea from a seed or impression.

How do you know if a concept is story worthy?

With my first novel, I accidentally managed to produce good structure. My main character had a concrete story goal early on. She also had a strong emotional desire stated in the opening sentence. From the initial moment of external conflict, the stakes continually increased, following a logical progression. It unfolded this way until the conclusion.

Easy peasy, right? Surely I had mastered the art of story structure and could replicate the process.

Not exactly.

I began a second book and focused on the emotional state of my character, neglecting to give her an external goal. Even though I was attempting a character-driven work and wanted to explore emotional growth, my protagonist still needed to have an external goal. 

The book had to be restructured to include both internal and external GMC – goal, motivation, conflict.

Broken down, it looks like this:

Goal: What does your protagonist want?

Motivation: Why do they want it?

Conflict: What’s in their way?

{Protagonist} wants {goal} because {motivation} but can’t succeed, because {conflict}.

All of the important characters in a successful story have both external and internal GMC. The differing goals produce conflict. They initiate the action and keep it going. Without a clear and concrete external goal for the protagonist to pursue and obstacles (conflict) to overcome, the story stagnates.

In plot driven stories, the external GMC is what keeps the story moving along. I find these easier to figure out. With character driven work, the character’s want directly opposes the (true) need. This produces conflict and forces growth in the character. Every character has internal and external goals and motivations. The two GMCs, external and internal, go hand in glove.

There will be many smaller goals and conflicts along the journey, but the overarching, or main, GMC of your story is the foundation of your premise.

The story premise is a few sentences distilling the key elements of your story, and incorporates the main GMC.

The premise contains:

The protagonist, set-up, protagonist’s goal, the source of resistance or antagonist, the core story conflict, and the protagonist’s motivation. A story premise can also include the other essential character(s).

Does the GMC or premise have to be perfectly expressed before you begin writing a novel? Not at all, but I’ve found the process goes much smoother if I understand what my character wants, needs, why they want what they do, and why they can’t have it. The better I solidify these things early on, the more likely I am to end up with a coherent story.

Nailing down GMC can take a few tries and a bit of time, but is well worth the effort.

Resource for Further Study

GMC: Goal, Motivation, and Conflict Book by Debra Dixon

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WRITING A FIRST NOVEL: CHOOSING A GENRE

Donna Jo Stone writes YA contemporary novels about tough issues but always ends the stories with a note of hope. She blogs at donnajostone.com.

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Songwriting

Understanding Songwriting Structure

If you have been following my articles on songwriting, perhaps you’re ready to write your first song. There are a few guidelines I would like to show you to get you started. Much like a haiku or even a piece of flash or hint fiction, there’s a definite pattern to successful songwriting, and your verbiage is limited. One of the biggest amateur mistakes is to write a song over five minutes, especially if that song contains little structure or design. Sure, it has happened, but rarely since the 1800’s.

Let’s start with the premise of the song. What is your song about? What is it you are trying to say? What is your point? Without a premise, you lose focus of what you are writing or why you are writing it. Think about it, you only have a few lines of chorus to truly say what you want to say, and then a few stanzas of poetry to support that chorus. Your words have to be carefully chosen: much like a haiku: much like a twenty-five word hint fiction.

Our premise becomes our song’s logline. It’s a song about what? It’s a song about a sinner who finds Jesus?  It’s a song about a man who lost his wife? It’s a song about a father having a hard time seeing his little princess grow up and get married? Once you have your logline of a song, you can develop your chorus idea. You don’t have to perfect your chorus at this point. You just want the chorus idea down.

There are literally 3 parts to a great song. There’s the verse, the chorus, and the bridge. We’ve talked about the chorus. The chorus supports the premise or the theme of your song.  The verse is what gives us the story. The verse paints different pictures that give the chorus credibility. Most songs on the radio have one or two verses then a chorus, followed by another verse or two, then the chorus. Let’s take a look at one of my recent, favorite songs called All My Hope, by David Crowder.

Studying the structure of a song

As we can see in the first verse, David gives us an introduction to our lead character, in first person.

I’ve been held by the savior / I’ve felt fire from above / I’ve been down to the river / I ain’t the same—a prodigal returned

In four simple lines (most verses are four lines), we learn who he is. But we still don’t know the premise or theme of the song. These four lines lead to that, which is found in the chorus. So what is our song about? Let’s see what David wrote for the chorus:

All my hope is in Jesus / Thank God my yesterday’s gone / All my sins are forgiven / I’ve been washed by the blood

Ah! Now we understand what the song is about! It’s about being forgiven! It’s about erasing the past through the blood of Jesus! It’s about the hope in Jesus that makes it all possible! That’s the premise! Jesus washes away our sins so we can be forgiven!

But then he moves on to the second verse to give us a little bit more into the story and description. The first verse was an introduction to who he is. The chorus told us the premise. The second verse now tells us a little more about who he is. No more need for introductions, this is him, wide open.

I’m no stranger to the prison / I’ve worn shackles and chains / But I’ve been freed and forgiven / I’m not going back—I’ll never be the same

This poetic verse makes you want to clap for him, doesn’t it? It’s a proclamation. The first two lines tell us a little deeper about his sin, the second two lines reminds us of the premise, supporting the chorus! Now we jump back into the chorus, with even more gusto!

If we lay out our structure, we have an ABAB pattern. It’s simple. A is the verses, B is the chorus. David adds another B for emphasis. This song reads, ABABB. The total length of this song is just over three minutes. For playability on radio, songs must be at least 3 minutes, but under five minutes. The target is between three to four minutes. However, if you listen to praise and worship, that’s often not going to happen, unless they make a radio friendly version of the song. There have been album versions of worship songs that are over 10 minutes long, albeit, the actual lyrical portion was under five.

Next month, we’ll talk about a little more advanced songwriting—adding the bridge and the purpose of it. Is there a songwriting topic you would like to discuss? Please feel free to write me at matthewhawkeldridge@gmail.com

 

Matthew Hawk Eldridge is a sleepless, coffee addicted, Renaissance man currently working in the film industry while attending grad school for creative writing. His latest novel, The Pan: Experiencing Neverland, can be found on Amazon. His album, Overcome, releases June 1st.